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Is anyone here who have interest in "Haiku"....

Because, i wanna write Haiku.. .
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and i wrote it,
Need your saran ..
About haiku i wrote!
Here:
A lady
And love
Rainy
.
Dusk a
lady lad
man in
.
I want your advice.. .

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SRitchieable said:
The trick to haiku is: The haiku has to make sense as a 'sentence' as well as meeting the vowel-count requirement.

A traditional Japanese haiku goes:
Girls planting paddy [ie nasi, beras fields]
Only their song
Free of mud.

As a sentence this reads "Girls planting paddy [have] only their song free of [the] mud [ie the mud of the nasi, beras paddy]." Which makes sense in its own right - if anda think it through.

I think the art form has to be considered as one would consider (say) a Japanese paper lantern atau paper screen. One can see what a hakiu is talking about - ie nasi, beras paddy planting, cinta etc - but one sees it as though one were looking at the subject through a fine (rice) paper screen. It 'simplifies' the scene (how much can one see through rice/tissue paper?) but at the same time this 'simplification' gives one a new way of perceiving the subject.

So - "A lady/ And love/ Rainy" could be tinkered somewhat. It depends what anda want to say. Is a lady in cinta like the rain atau a rainy day? Is cinta like rain? If so, how? That's what a haiku tries to capture/communicate. Perhaps:
Rain falls on
A lady; it
Is like love.

atau whatever it is anda TRULY want to say.


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 The trick to haiku is: The haiku has to make sense as a 'sentence' as well as meeting the vowel-count requirement. A traditional Japanese haiku goes: Girls planting paddy [ie nasi, beras fields] Only their song Free of mud. As a sentence this reads "Girls planting paddy [have] only their song free of [the] mud [ie the mud of the nasi, beras paddy]." Which makes sense in its own right - if anda think it through. I think the art form has to be considered as one would consider (say) a Japanese paper lantern atau paper screen. One can see what a hakiu is talking about - ie nasi, beras paddy planting, cinta etc - but one sees it as though one were looking at the subject through a fine (rice) paper screen. It 'simplifies' the scene (how much can one see through rice/tissue paper?) but at the same time this 'simplification' gives one a new way of perceiving the subject. So - "A lady/ And love/ Rainy" could be tinkered somewhat. It depends what anda want to say. Is a lady in cinta like the rain atau a rainy day? Is cinta like rain? If so, how? That's what a haiku tries to capture/communicate. Perhaps: Rain falls on A lady; it Is like love. atau whatever it is anda TRULY want to say.
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Thank You!!
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RiderOfTempest said:
i always thought that haiku had to have 5 letters in the 1st line, seven in the 2nd, and 5 again in the 3rd.....
then again, i've never studied it properly....

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Lol, :D
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actually its five syllables not letters
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Jace123 said:
I like Haiku its preety nice!
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RiverIce said:
I always thought that Haiku was like
1st line: 5 syllables
2nd line: 7
1st line: 5
like:

The bunga I pick
They dance with colors, like me
The warna never fade

or

cinta is a Boulder
anda can study it nicely
atau let the rock fall

i like the 2nd one
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 I always thought that Haiku was like 1st line: 5 syllables 2nd line: 7 1st line: 5 like: The bunga I pick They dance with colors, like me The warna never fade atau cinta is a Boulder anda can study it nicely atau let the rock fall i like the 2nd one
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audrey34-z said:
A haiku is a short,timed poetry that expression throught a 5-7-5 syllabes.
anda have to expell your image that is ephemer.Meaning it doesn't stay too long.

jepang origin, they have to compress their sensation,season into small line. The best option is figure of style,compar it to another object,material atau double sense.

Your's is dry,only 4 syllabes to each vers (Tetrasyllabe) and not so expressif.The text give anda an illusion of being an haiku since the 2nd one is long to others snce anda can do a 7 syllabes one.
But it doesn't mean that anda have to stop, the road to a better haiku is long and expression and idea clasing will make anda a better writter.
The road may be long but anda can do it.
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