Avatar: The Last Airbender

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What do anda think about my fanfiction?

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I started making it last summer, there are only oc's and i really need some feedback ( here and on deviantart ).
P.S. I f anda are going to actually read it I want to say sorry for the grammar errors (english it'd not my mother language and my keyboar hates me )
 shippo_33 posted lebih dari setahun yang lalu
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OptimusThunder said:
I read chapters 1 and 2. Good start! I applaud your creativity and I like the premise of chapter 1.
As an aspiring writer myself, I suggest that anda put in some descriptions of the surroundings and make your characters do things, pindah around and be active. Try to balance the dialogue with actions.
Also, sometimes I got confused on who was talking. Use some quick (I said) atau (he said) after the dialogue to make it lebih clear to the reader who is talking.

Again, good work. Keep writing!
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I got the same saran and i started adding lebih keterangan in the chapter 9. I can tell anda tings are getting weird
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