menulis Article: Learning to let go ch. one

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posted by Funnygirl77

Leting go of the ones anda cinta is like falling out of an airplane with no para shoot

Leting go of the ones you love is like falling out of an airplane with no para shoot

Nothing is harder then losing the one anda love. The One person who understands anda the most, The one who give anything to keep anda aman, brankas and happy even if that means losing their own life to save yours. I learned this the hard way, When a tahun yang lalu today, I lost my parents, my brother and my sister, in a house fire.

May 19 2010 Monday 12:01 am
It's been a tahun since I lost my family, and it hasn't been any easier. I have nightmares about what happen, ever nightmare is the same. It starts off with me being with my family, Everyone is laughing and having a good time, then out of no where, there faces start to melt off It gets really hot and then I wake up. Of course I wasn't there, I was at my friends house, but I still fill responsible.

I sat up, then looked at the clock it was 12:12 I laid my head back down on my bantal and closed my eyes in no time I was back asleep, having that same dream over and over aging. I awoke with a headache My aunt knocked on the door. "Naomi, Honey, are anda awake?" I got out of the tempat tidur and opened the door. Aunt Maggie stepped in side "are anda okay sweetie?" I didn't answer I just stood there with my head down. Aunt Maggie stood there for awhile, then turned and left the room.

May 19 2010 Monday 7:00
There was a Knock on the front door, I went down stairs, it was Jane. She looked at me then shook her head. "Are anda ever going to stop were that Damn hoodie?" I looked at her, then grabbed my bag and headed out the door. She followed behind me, I opened the car door took out my I-pod and turned it up. Jane stared the car, Then pulled over, I looked at her. "What are anda doing?!" I asked.

"Naomi I cinta anda and all but anda got to stop fill sorry for yourself, there's nothing anda can do, it wasn't your fault it's not like anda caused the stupid fire." I looked at her, her words cut like Knifes, she looked back at me. I looked away, "Could anda just drive." Jane unlocked the doors, "Get out." I looked at her "J-" she shook her head, "Get out"

I got out the car, and Jane drove away, I started to walk to school, but then had to stop because the tears wouldn't stop coming. Some one drove past me, then backed up, they rolled down the window. "Get in" he said, it was Alec the only emo kid at my school. I opened the door and go in. I still had my I-pod in and my tears had turned my eyes red. I could fill his eyes on me, so I kept my head down.

May 19 2010 8:01 am Monday
I went to my halaman awal room class and, put my head down, Jane sat beside me. I see anda made it to school, I turned away I couldn't let her see how much she hurt me. Jane just tsked at me, then turned to talk to other people. I could fill some ones eyes one me, so I looked up to see who it was, it was Alec, our eyes meet, and I felt something. I couldn't stop looking in to his blue eyes, and he didn't stop looking at me. The teacher came in and Alec turned to the front. I sighed and took my ear phones out.

The rest of the school hari went oleh quicker then I'm use too. The whole time in study hall and at lunch i could fill his eyes on me. I meet Jane oleh my locker, before the last period of the day, She looked at me. "Naomi, I'm sorry I was just Mad, anda aren't the only one who lost some one anda cinta lets not forget anda aunt, and what about me, I was in cinta with your brother, do anda know what his last words were too me?" I didn't answer her, "He told me he loved me."

The bel, bell rung, and I walked away, Jane walked beside me. "Look na na I berkata I'm sorry." I looked at her, I nodded, "thanks Jane for what anda said, but I'm just not ready to let go." Jane walked away, then turned around "well when anda do let me know." She went in to her class, I started to walk to my class, Then out of no where the api alarm rung. Everyone was run out of classes I stopped, I didn't know what to do.

There was shadows all around me, ever thing stared spinning. I sat down, The api alarm kept getting louder and louder. Some one stood in front of me, They grabbed my shoulder and lifted me up. They crawled me like a baby, then we were out side, I looked up, and Alec was above me. His eyes locked on mine. I couldn't pull away, I got lost in his eyes aging filling that same filling I felt aging. that same strange filling, Alec helped me sit up.

Then I pulled away from under his hand, I didn't mean to come off ungrateful I just don't like when people touch me. Alec scooted away, to give me some air, when he thought i was okay, he came over to me to help me stand. Once the school was cleared, everyone went back in. Jane came rushing over to me, when she saw me. she gave me a hug, "Your okay, i didn't see anda come out, so I thought." I pushed away from her, she stopped talking.

Then said, "You know,what Naomi. This is to much, I tried to stay being your friend, but I just can't handle your Behavior, your just to much." She walked away, I could fill his eyes on me I turned around Then looked away quickly.

May 19 2010 3:30 am Monday
Jane left with out me so I stared to walk, It would be 4:30 when I get home. It was about to rain so I put my hoddie on. Then it started to thunder so I took my phone out and was about to Call my aunt, but then Alec pulled up beside me. He opened the door I looked at him, being careful not to met his eyes. Then after a while I got in.

When I got home, I went up stairs and took a mandi, shower my aunt wasn't halaman awal yet my phone rung, it was a text from Jane. Hope anda made it halaman awal okay, If anda didn't I'm sorry, I need anda to forget my number, don't call me don't text me don't send me and email, because like I berkata before. I'm done with you. I put my phone down and knocked over my raiser blade I picked it up and pressed it to my risk.
May 19 2010 Monday 8:08
I closed my eyes and fell asleep.

sorry it was so long Hope anda liked it komentar and rate just to let yall know it's not real

Nice-Guy, Rennerocks and 5 others like this

SweetKittyNikki I like it!! u should rite more! :))

rose12345 I loved it!!! I agree with SweetKittyNikki you should write more. :D

NeeNee14 This is really good! Jane's a bitch..she lost her whole family...She only lost her brother and when she gets mad she uses it against her....she acts like she was the only one who suffered..at least her parents are still alive

Jamie38459 Wow, that was so far the longest article I have ever read....

SweetKittyNikki U didnt like it Jamie38459?

bri-marie [i]Nothing is harder then losing the one you love. The One person who understands you the most, The one who give anything to keep you safe and happy even if that means losing their own life to save yours. I learned this the hard way, When a year ago today, I lost my parents, my brother and my sister, in a house fire.[/i] This is a little confusing. You (she) goes from talking about loosing "one person" to talking about loosing her whole family (well, not literally her whole family. You know what I mean). Was she only close to one person in her family? [i]I didn't answer I just stood there with my head down. Aunt Maggie stood there for awhile, then turned and left the room.[/i] Aunt Maggie doesn't really seem to care about what Naomi is going through. [i]May 19 2010 Monday 7:00[/i] You've already told us what the date was. You don't have to [i]keep[/i] telling us; especially when it's only a few 'hours' after the last time. [i]it was Jane.[/i] And Jane is . . . ? [i]"Are you ever going to stop were that Damn hoodie?"[/i] What hoodie? What does it look like? Does she not wash it; is that why Jane is upset about it? [i]Jane stared the car, Then pulled over,[/i] When did they start driving? [i]"Naomi I love you and all but you got to stop fill sorry for yourself, there's nothing you can do, it wasn't your fault it's not like you caused the stupid fire."[/i] Were you going for making Jane the biggest bitch in history? [i]May 19 2010 8:01 am Monday[/i] Yes, we know. You told us this three paragraphs ago. Why don't you just not put in the date? You don't even really need the time, since only an 'hour' or so passes until you tell us again. [i]I felt something.[/i] Butterflies? Her stomach somersaulting? Hiccups? Nausea? Hunger? What? [i]The rest of the school day went by quicker then I'm use too.[/i] How/in what way? [i]The whole time in study hall and at lunch i could fill his eyes on me.[/i] I'm assuming that she and Alec are friends? Other wise, why would she accept a ride from him and not be creeped out by him staring constantly? [i]do you know what his last words were too me?" I didn't answer her, "He told me he loved me."[/i] She makes it seem like a bad thing. If that isn't what you were going for (or maybe it is, since Jane is nasty) it really needs re-wording. [i]"Look na na[/i] 'Na na' is a very odd nickname for 'Naomi.' It reminds me of what I used to call my great-grandmother, which probably isn't the visual you want for your teenage protagonist. Did it spring up from some private joke between the two of them or does everyone call her 'na na'? Why is this the only time in the entire chapter that it's used? [i]I stopped, I didn't know what to do.[/i] Is she stupid? Schools all over have fire-drills at an alarming rate (my high school has about eleven throughout the entire year). Plus, common sense would tell her to follow everyone out of the building. She can't smell smoke, feel heat, or see the fire so there really isn't a reason for her to freeze up like this. On a side-note, there really isn't a reason for students to be running around without teachers supervising. It's [i]why[/i] they have fire-drills - so the students and teachers know what to do when the fire-alarm goes off unplanned (or there's a legitimate fire). [i]There was shadows all around me, ever thing stared spinning. I sat down,[/i] Why? [i]I got lost in his eyes aging filling that same filling I felt aging. that same strange filling, Alec helped me sit up.[/i] What? I have no idea what you're (she's) trying to say here. [i]I just don't like when people touch me.[/i] She didn't seem to care when he picked her up and carried her away. [i]May 19 2010 3:30 am Monday[/i] Still not needed. [i]I put my hoddie on.[/i] She was wearing it when Jane picked her up that morning. When did she take it off? Unless you meant she put the hood up? [i]my aunt wasn't home yet[/i] Then why was she going to call her? [i]Hope you made it home okay, If you didn't I'm sorry, I need you to forget my number, don't call me don't text me don't send me and email, because like I said before. I'm done with you.[/i] Jane is bipolar. . [i]May 19 2010 Monday 8:08[/i] Still not needed. [i]I closed my eyes and fell asleep.[/i] Standing up in the bathroom? Over all, it's very confusing. You're seriously lacking in the spelling, sentence patterns and punctuation and, in many cases, it becomes hard to decipher what you're trying to say. You have almost no descriptions of anything. What do Jane, Alec, Aunt Maggie, and Naomi look like? What does the school look/sound/feel like? Telling us the date and time doesn't really serve a purpose. Nothing major is happening and there only hours apart. I'm not sure whether or not you meant to make Jane to be a bipolar bitch or not. She doesn't seem to know what she thinks about Naomi, nor does she seem to care that her parents were killed. The fact that she isn't even trying to help Naomi or sympathize with her tells the readers that she isn't a very good friend. Alec seems creepy; he only says two words this entire chapter, but he's always around to give Naomi a ride and stare at her (which, it's weird that Naomi doesn't seem to think anything of Alec, whom she hardly has any contact with, is doing this). It also seems to cliché that, for no reason, Naomi is having “feelings” about Alec for no reason. I think you have a good idea, but it just needs a lot of work.

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posted by para-scence

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posted by para-scence

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posted by para-scence

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posted by itchygum

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posted by Vampiyaa

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posted by Insight357

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posted by Insight357

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posted by coolie

Chapter 7

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