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I woke up feeling sick it was the third night in a row I have been getting these dreams. The dreams of pure terror, war, death and carnage. I can feel the restlessness of my younger siblings from the other side of the tempat tidur we all share. I get up and walk downstairs to start making breakfast I am the main provider for my siblings as father is away on work for our rulers nobody knows when he is coming back. My mother died when I was seven she died while giving birth to my 3rd brother. My 6th sibling. We have a steady income coming in from father’s job. I start cooking our simple roti panggang and apel, apple jus made from the apples in the garden. I hear the sound of 6 pairs of feet my siblings are awake. I smile as they walk in “good morning leo and annie” I say and hug them both they are my youngest siblings leo is 6 years old and annie is 7 then I berkata good morning to Rachel and Jem they are 9 tahun old twins and finally came in Lucy she’s ten and Simon my 12 tahun old brother we all sit at our meja and eat while cheerfully talking about going to school. I send the boys upstairs to get ready and we girls clean up. I hear I big crash upstairs I rush up the stairs still carrying the plate I was drying when I enter out bedroom I drop the plate in shock.
The room is full of dirt and dust I can’t see anything I hear the sound of crying I think it might be Leo I run towards the sound it is Leo I pick him up and carry him downstairs ordering Rachel to clear the meja while Lucy holds Leo and I go find Jem and Simon as I enter the room again I can see a bit better I call out “SIMON JEM ARE anda OKAY” I hear a muffled sound of coughing I’m on my hands and knees crawling around trying to find them I feel a hand underneath mine I pick whoever it is up as I run downstairs with the body I look down a see that it is Simon I place Simon on the meja and run back up the stairs to find Jem. I can’t lose one of the twins I just can’t I will find him for mum. I just wish I coul