Opinion on my new song?

I spilled my jantung out on that blood soaked battle ground
The black apocalypse of the night
My mind halaman awal to tortured souls
Pain and misery a long forgotten suffering
For this is the hell, the bane of heaven itself
A blackness to ignite the lonely torture of the heart

The end is nigh scream the malaikat in the sky
The fallen of hell agree ignorance is bliss
Pain in the vain not a simple cure
Look to death as the answer
cari for the light in a cover of black
The end is nigh so scream your jantung out

Your mum says your wrong, the whole world of hate
Your dad says stay strong, the whole world of hate
Your sister tells anda don’t cry, the whole world of hate
Your brother tells anda the weak, the whole world of hate
Your granddad says guess what, the whole world of hate
Your Nana says listen now, the whole world of hate

The end is nigh scream the malaikat in the sky
The fallen of hell agree ignorance is bliss
Pain in the vain not a simple cure
Look to death as the answer
cari for the light in a cover of black
The end is nigh so scream your jantung out

Cry big black tears
The world is so wrong
Hear the malaikat cry
Watch Satan scream
The suffering of this world
Can’t life be just a dream?

The end is nigh scream the malaikat in the sky
The fallen of hell agree ignorance is bliss
Pain in the vain not a simple cure
Look to death as the answer
cari for the light in a cover of black
The end is nigh so scream your jantung out