I made this a forum instead of a question because I have quite a few things I'd like to ask and I thought this format would be better than a question.
My story is about my favorite TV show, Criminal Minds. It takes place in "2012", which is equal to 2008 in the real world and Criminal Minds storyline. My character and the characters on the show meet because my character witnessed a murder and has to go to a safe house because it puts her in danger.
1. A fact pertaining to adults about breakfast.
2. A show a grown man would watch, and a summary of what it's about.
3. I also would kind of like a link to a dream decoder type site, if anyone knows an accurate one.
I need advice on:
1. . “I heard movement, I was coming to make sure you were safe," or . “I heard movement, I was coming to make sure everything was okay,” This is complicated because this dialog is between two characters who later fall in love. The "you were safe" is more romantic, and I don't know if I want it to imply that this early in the story. (This sentence is about 2,800 words in, my chapter splicing sucks)
I think that's it for now. This is the first story I've written that I'm satisfied with for this long, and already longer than the two I finished. Again, I would really appreciate anything you had to say.