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Would the point of view of a really bratty person ruin the story?
The thing is, in my story I sometimes switch the POV in some chapters. It usually is from the point of view of the protagonists a girl named April. To make a long story really short, she basically gets kidnapped oleh the queen who takes over the area. The past few chapters have been talking about her in the castle, but I want to bring it back to Aprils home. I decided to put it in the point of view of her bratty cousin Natali. Would anda think that would be really annoying for the readers?
Here is a sample:
Everyone is worried. April being gone was a scary thing, but no one was looking at the bright side. With her gone, I no longer had someone sleeping in the corner of my room creepily. Of course, it was her room, but now that I was here it mostly was mine. The superior always get the best accommodations. Obviously, I am better than everyone here, including April. The queen herself gave me a gift. No one could puncak, atas that.
“Where is my scarf!” I yelped, feeling the nothingness where my scarf once was. Obviously one of these children April called friends mencuri it.
“You just barely noticed it was gone?” Jacob laughed. I scowled in return. He had no right to be talking to me like that.
“Natali, we’ll find it later. We have lebih important things to deal with.” Julia berkata quietly. April’s other friend, 4 gave his agreement with a silent nod.
“More important! Nothing can be lebih important than my scarf!” I stated. The others looked at me in shock, eyes grown ridiculously wide.
“Even your cousin?” 4 asked. How could they be so ignorant?
“Now anda get my point!” I replied. I could tell annoyance was dripping from my voice, but I didn’t care.
Thanks in advance!
Here is a sample:
Everyone is worried. April being gone was a scary thing, but no one was looking at the bright side. With her gone, I no longer had someone sleeping in the corner of my room creepily. Of course, it was her room, but now that I was here it mostly was mine. The superior always get the best accommodations. Obviously, I am better than everyone here, including April. The queen herself gave me a gift. No one could puncak, atas that.
“Where is my scarf!” I yelped, feeling the nothingness where my scarf once was. Obviously one of these children April called friends mencuri it.
“You just barely noticed it was gone?” Jacob laughed. I scowled in return. He had no right to be talking to me like that.
“Natali, we’ll find it later. We have lebih important things to deal with.” Julia berkata quietly. April’s other friend, 4 gave his agreement with a silent nod.
“More important! Nothing can be lebih important than my scarf!” I stated. The others looked at me in shock, eyes grown ridiculously wide.
“Even your cousin?” 4 asked. How could they be so ignorant?
“Now anda get my point!” I replied. I could tell annoyance was dripping from my voice, but I didn’t care.
Thanks in advance!
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