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can any body look at my story for me and komentar what anda think and if anda would read a detik chapter?[there is a link in the details]

here is the link the name of it is eternal love:

 lilred96 posted lebih dari setahun yang lalu
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samlover316 said:
Okay, I'm sorry, but I couldn't get through the first paragraph of this story because of the appalling amount of spelling and grammatical errors in it. There aren't even spaces between the punctuation marks, and anda use the wrong "to". What grade must anda be in to not have learned which "to" to use? Your sentences are run-ons and they have little relevancy. There is no flow to your story; it's just choppy and uninteresting. I would suggest that anda use Microsoft Word to rewrite this (spell-check) and possibly your mom atau English teacher. I wouldn't really want to read another chapter of this. Plus, it sounds just like Twilight. Except much, much worse. I'm sorry if you're offended oleh this, but it just isn't very good. I didn't want to sugarcoat it. I'm sure it could be a very good story, if maybe anda asked for help from an adult atau older sibling. Again, sorry, but as someone once said: "Lies never help anything, not in the long run, anyway. It's better to make an honest mess and clean it up." atau something like that, sorry, I don't have the quote in front of me. But anda should definitely give it another go, just make sure anda ubah your work.
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