pony Dump

So this is my first pony fic! Tell me what anda think please?
“Where are we going, Twilight?” applejack asked. Twilight Sparkle ignored her friend, and plodded onward through the Evergreen Forest, oblivious to the fear emanating from her companions.

“Wh-why are we in here?” Fluttershy stammered nervously, almost forgetting to flap her wings as she hovered above the other ponies. Twilight turned to her, the exasperation clear on her face.
“I told you, I need a special root for my spells, and it only grows in the Evergreen Forest!”
Fluttershy nodded and muttered a quick “yes”, trembling....

Let's start with applejack bucking apples........

AJ: wow, I bet I just got a new high record on bucking apples!
AB: sis, when am I gonna have my cutie mark?
AJ: apel, apple bloom! I've told ya a billion times, I don't know!
AB: UGH!............Hey! Here comes pelangi dash!
AJ: Now go run along ya little pony
AB: ok! (leaves)
RD: 'sup applejack
AJ: howdy rainbow!
RD: So, wanna come over to fluttershy's house today?
AJ: sorry sugarcube, but I got lots of work to do
RD: oh AJ! Can't anda just chill for a second?
AJ: I will, but I still need to do some work
RD: who cares about work! C'mon PLLLEEAASSEE!!!!!
AJ: well...

This isnt THE fanfic ive been planning. Its just something that popped into my mind after membaca creepypastas. If I get enough good reviews, ill continue it. Any feedback would be massively appreciated. No descriptive gore.

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I quietly galloped into the boutique, only to see my little sister, Sweetie Belle, sprawled on the floor, sobbing her lit eyes out. Surrounding her were multiple papers emblazed with drawings and doodles. To her left was a box of crayons.
"What's wrong, Sweetie? I thought you'd be with your friends."
She turned to stare at me.
"I was, but then Scootaloo went to help...

queen of Changelings: This hari is going to be perfect, the kind of hari of which I've dreamed since I was small, everypony will gather round, say I look lovely in my gown, what they don't know is that I have fooled them all!

Princess Cadence: This hari was going to be perfect, the kind of hari of which I've dreamed since I was small, but instead of having cake, with all my friends to celebrate, my wedding bells, they may not ring for me at all!

Queen of Changelings: I could care less about the dress, I won't partake in any cake! Vows? Well, I'll be lying when I say, that through any kind of weather,...

Here are some reasons I think Pinkie Pie is better than pelangi Dash.

1. Pinkie Pie doesn't tend to tampil off atau brag about her accomplishments.

2. Pinkie doesn't care about being cool. She just wants to have fun.

3. Pinkie will go out of her way just to make somepony else happy while pelangi is just in it for the glory.

4. Pinkie sings lebih and has a prettier voice. (Who cares if she sometimes does it randomly out of nowhere?)

5. pelangi Dash can be a little bossy to Fluttershy while Pinkie just tries to help Fluttershy out of her shell in a cute, cheerful way.

6. Pinkie Pie is so random...and that's...

Now a rainbow's tale isn't quite as nice
 As the story we knew of sugar and spice
But a rainbow's easy once anda get to know it
With the help of the magic of a pegasus device

(music break)

Let's delve deeper into pelangi philosophy
Far beyond that of Cloudsdale's mythology
It's easy to misjudge that floating city
With it's alluring decor and social psychology

But with all great things comes a great responsibility
That of Cloudsdale's being weather stability
How, anda ask, are they up to the task
To which the answer is in a simple facility

(music break)

In the pelangi Factory, where your fears and horrors...